Is this email in replying my professor email good? Any suggestions for improving it? [10 points]?
Question by river: Is this email in replying my professor email good? Any suggestions for improving it? [10 points]?
Please read his email below first. This is the email I am going to send to him at the end of our semester. Is it good? Any suggestions for improving it?
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Dear Professor Johnson,
Thank you very much for your email and the very precise feedback on my project.
EDUC 890 was a really great course, and I enjoyed every session of our class and their activities. Each of our course sessions, was followed by learning about many new ideas and perspectives that broadened my views on the use of media in education.
I very much appreciate the feedbacks and improvement suggestions you kindly provided on each step of our design. These feedbacks and guidelines helped me greatly in finding the gaps in the draft version of my project and enhance its quality on its final version. At the end, I also applied the final suggestions I received to improve my design after presenting it in the class.
Thank you very much again, and have a nice holidays break,
Best regards,
Mary
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Mary,
Since you are taking this intro course as your final course, it was no surprise to me that your learning design was more polished and complete than those of most other students in the class. However, the volume of work you have accomplished here is very impressive. The content is very deep, well organized, and consistent with the learning goals you have laid out in your rationale paper. The site is attractive and easy to navigate, and I think the advance organizer really may help students to see and understand the “whole” of the course. Finally, I appreciate your effort to find some literature to support for your design rationale, and the effort you put into designing the summative evaluation. Well done!
GRADE: A+
Some nit-picky comments:
- Design “Rationale” is spelled with an “e” at the end. Rational is an adjective. You handed in a noun!
- I think Jordan’s point is valid, that students will understand the name “final exam” better than “summative evaluation.”
- I would have preferred to have your references in APA format.
- When citing a paper in the body of your text, give author and year, like this: (Graham, 2010)
Best answer:
Answer by Lexi
The email is good. Like your prof, I will offer some nit-picky comments:
Feedbacks should be feedback. That is the both the singular and plural form.
Change enhance to enhancing, so its is a continuation of your sentence. The way you have it says “…helped me greatly in … enhance its quality on its final version.” It doesn’t matter that you have words in between because it should be dealt with as if it is a continuation of the beginning of the sentence.
And in the end, maybe just say “have a nice holiday” or “have a happy holiday”. Saying “holiday” and “break” together is redundant. However, if you want to stick with what you have, it should be written “holiday’s”, with a possessive apostrophe and ended with a period.
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February 10, 2012 · 
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